Week 7 Story: What Goes Around

Illustration of a dance by Margaret Flatley. Source: Link.
As the first half of junior year came to a close at Central High School, the day of the Sadie Hawkins dance grew closer and closer and students were becoming concerned with finding a date. Two students, Katie and Piper, were among those who did not have a date yet and they both had their sights on one person: Brian Vance.
Now Piper was known by her peers as the sweet, easy-going girl who got along with almost everybody, but Katie was a vengeful, bitter girl who would do anything to get her way. As both girls though of ways to ask Brian to the dance, Katie called upon her younger friends to make sure nobody else was planning on asking him. 
In compliance with her wishes, Katie's friends reached out and talked to people in their classes to find out who already had dates and who girls without dates were planning on asking. Eventually they confronted Piper and asked who she was planning on asking, so not thinking much of the question she told them about her plans to ask Brian. Upon hearing this, the girls immediately let Katie know and they devised a plan to prevent Piper from being able to ask Brian to the dance.
One week before the day of the dance, Katie and Piper prepared their signs to ask Brian and planned on doing it after school, so they both brought the signs rolled up with them and kept them in the school's gym where Brian would be. Since Katie knew about Piper's plan, she pretended to use the bathroom during class and snuck into the gym to destroy Piper's sign. In order to prevent being caught, she quickly tore up the sign and then returned to class feeling accomplished.
Once the end of the day arrived, Piper and Katie both walked to the gym to get their signs and asked Brian to the dance, but there was only one sign there with a pile of shreds sitting next to it. Katie smirked when she saw Piper's look of confusion and condescendingly grabbed the sign still intact, but when she unrolled it she did not recognize the sign. She had torn up her own sign and left Piper's unharmed!
Piper kindly asked Katie for her sign back and happily strolled over to Brian to ask him to the dance, and he said yes! Katie left the gym embarrassed and in tears and Piper stayed with Brian to talk about what they would wear to the dance.

Author's note: This retelling was inspired by "The Jealous Wife", a story in Notes on the Folklore of the Fjort by Richard Edward Dennett which describes two wives who bear children to the same man. The younger wife's child is much more intelligent than the older wife's child, so she gets jealous and decides to kill the child, but the next morning she finds that she killed her own child and is put to death for it. I decided to put a lighter twist on it where two girls are planning on asking the same boy to a dance, so when the mean girl tries to sabotage the other's sign, she destroys her own and is embarrassed in front of the boy she wanted to ask.

Comments

  1. Hi Maci,
    I loved the concept you did for this story! While I was reading the story, I was wondering what this was based off of, and I was surprised to see how the original story was extremely suspenseful and dark.Your writing was detailed, and I was able to paint a picture in my head clearly. Great work! Can't wait to read more from you!

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  2. Hi Maci! I loved the modern spin you put on this story! It made it super fun to read & was very creative. That is the beauty of doing a blog about stories in mythology! It always brings a modern element to classic stories that some may view as outdated. Anyways, the detail and character development in this story was great and I loved reading it! Great job!

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  3. Hey Maci! I really liked your story this week, it was a really interesting twist on the original story! I liked how you combined the plot from the original story with more modern elements to make it more relatable. I liked how you were so detailed about each character and their motivations-- it really made me happy to see that Katie had ruined her own sign at the end instead of Piper's. She definitely got what she deserved in the end. Great job!

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  4. Hi Maci,

    Nice story! I really like how the tension was built between Katie and Piper. This story reminds me of Mean Girls a little bit. I like how Katie got what she deserved and accidentally destroyed her own sign. One thing that I wondered was why did Katie give up Piper's sign so easily? She seems like she would try to lie and deny that it was Piper's sign.

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  5. Hi Maci!

    I loved your story! I think it was really interesting and drove home an important point! You reap what you sow, right? Good luck with the rest of the semester!

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  7. Hi Maci,
    I really enjoyed reading your story. It was short and sweet and I love the ending. I am really glad that you changed the original story, it was quite dark. I would like to see a bit more character development for Piper. We get to see a lot of Katie and I think it would be nice to know how Piper feels/thinks about what happens.

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  8. Hi Maci!

    I enjoyed reading this story, nicely done. I really liked how you described the situation. It seemed like it could have happened in real life! You did a good job with the ending, and it kind of gives a nice moral lesson. I wonder why they both liked Brian so much, maybe you could have explored that a bit more. Great job overall!

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  9. Hi Maci!

    This story is so cute! It's so creative how you took a darker tale and turned it into a fun, lighthearted story about junior high girls asking a boy to a dance. And the name Brian Vance is perfect for the cute/popular boy in school . It was also very easy to imagine Katie and Piper's characters because you did a great job describing their personalities. I can just imagine sweet Piper happily going to ask Brian to the dance with her sign. That was my favorite part of the story.

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  10. Hi Maci!

    I really loved reading this story. It was quite amazing how you took a normally dark tale, and made it very fun and entertaining. The situation was applicable to many people, yet you also maintained the initial plot points and the moral of the story. I am overall very impressed! I cannot wait to read more of your writing.

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